You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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to express my interest in your one-week walking trip and

also

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discuss

about

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fitness

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the fitness

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level required to make it.

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with, I came across a brochure

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about

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your one-week

tour

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walking

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a walking

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excursion in the mountains, which fascinated me. I have always been appreciative of

the

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apply

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nature walks and I love going for a small walk in

woods

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the woods

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or in parks close to

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nature.

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, I did not have an opportunity for an excursion in

mountains

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the mountains

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and I would love

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this

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tour

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of yours. To make myself available for

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trip, could you please share detailed information,

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as exact dates and prices so that I can plan

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Additionally

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, It would be great to know what

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is included in the package.

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, whether meals and night accommodation are included in the

tour

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price.

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I have been part of a few hiking tours, they were only one or two days long.

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is the longest

tour

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I would be planning for. So, I wanted to check

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whether

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excursion would be suitable for me as I am a little overweight. Would there be any assistance provided should there be any need

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Thanks for taking the time to read

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, and I look forward to your response. Regards, Sumit Dua

sumitdua10Sat Apr 19 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure clarity by clearly stating your concerns about fitness in a separate paragraph.

task achievement

Minor grammatical errors like 'discuss about' should be corrected to 'discuss'.

task achievement

The letter conveys enthusiasm for the tour and appreciation for nature clearly and positively.

coherence and cohesion

There is a logical flow to your request for information and expression of concerns, which helps maintain coherence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

223 words

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