Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would be benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole Do you agree or disagree?

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language
Improve spelling and grammar to enhance readability. For example, 'deming' should be 'denying', 'belife' should be 'belief', 'commuity' should be 'community', and 'teengeders' should be 'teenagers'.
structure
Organize your ideas more clearly by using topic sentences for each paragraph and ensuring that each paragraph contains one main idea.
development
Provide more specific examples to support your points. Rather than general statements about how skills will help, providing a context or scenario can strengthen your argument.
argument
You presented a clear position on the topic, expressing your opinion.
focus
Your intention to discuss the positive effects of unpaid work is relevant and important.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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