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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would be benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There is no
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denying
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work
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 in the free time will improve our
skils
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skills
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.
While
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 it is a commonly held
belife
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belief
 that, young folks should help the
commuity
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community
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unpaid
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an unpaid
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job
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jobs
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 in
the
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 free time, there is
also
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 an
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argument
 that
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opposes
posses
 it. In my
opninion
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opinion
i
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 consider, that
teenegers
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teenagers
 must help
the
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apply
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society by
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work
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.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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withe
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with
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, many young folks
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waste
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there
their
this
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with
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nigtive
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negative
thing
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things
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 so,
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work
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in
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this
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 age will
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affect
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positivle
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positive
positively
. In
the
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meaning
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of
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, they will
konw
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know
 how to deal
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with
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 people and
having
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 information about the
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invariant
 of
work
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also
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, they will gain
crical
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critical
crucial
 skills on tiny age.
For example
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,
aplying
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applying
 for
job
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a job
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 ned
alot
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a lot
 of skills and
experines
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experience
 years
however
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,
every thing
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everything
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 will be easy for
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them
 because they have
it
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 since the
begin
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 of
thier
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their
 life.
Body paragraph 2
Another
ponit
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point
 to consider,
contries
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countries
 may have a huge development.
In other words
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, If the new
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generation
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 how to deal with each other and every
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type
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have
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experines
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experience
 the
socitey
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society
 will improve and,
this
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 may help to overcome many problems.
For
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instance
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have
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 information about jobs so in the
futhere
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future
further
the
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they
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 will
konw
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know
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typ
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type
 of job
fint
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for
 them and can
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choose
 it
easely
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easily
.
Conclusion
In conclusion, despite people having
diffrent opninon
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different opinions
i
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cionsider
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consider
, that in these
age
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ages
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 people dont have
idea
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any idea
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 about
there
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their
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futuer
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future
 so they need to try to
work
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 to have a idea.

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language
Improve spelling and grammar to enhance readability. For example, 'deming' should be 'denying', 'belife' should be 'belief', 'commuity' should be 'community', and 'teengeders' should be 'teenagers'.
structure
Organize your ideas more clearly by using topic sentences for each paragraph and ensuring that each paragraph contains one main idea.
development
Provide more specific examples to support your points. Rather than general statements about how skills will help, providing a context or scenario can strengthen your argument.
argument
You presented a clear position on the topic, expressing your opinion.
focus
Your intention to discuss the positive effects of unpaid work is relevant and important.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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