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The table below shows the Japanese population by different age groups from 1970 to 2040.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the Japanese population by different age groups from 1970 to 2040.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graph gives information about the percentage of individuals from various age groups;0-14,25-64,65+ in Japan from 1960 to 2040.
Overall
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,it is apparent that
while
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 over 65-year-old
people
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 were fewer than others,they will increase.
However
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, 0-14 and 25-64 year-old humans will decrease
at the end
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 of the given period. In detail,in 1960 ,65+
people
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 started at nearly 5% and they maintained their stable level for a decade.The indicator for 65+
people
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 rosed significantly, accounting for around
one third
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 before staying at
steady
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a steady
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 level between 2020 and 2030.Afterwards,it will grow minimally, making up approximately 35%.
However
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,the figure for 0-14
people
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 fluctuated by 1990 before declining to 10% in 2040.In the beginning,
people
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 who were 25-64 years old, were higher than other groups.After they will dip in 2030 , they will still comprise the highest level by the end of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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