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Band 4

The plans below shows a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

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The maps provide key information about Porth Harbour in 2000 and how it appears recently nowadays.
Overall
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, it is clear from the planes that there is a significant development throughout the years.
In addition
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, in the past
lay out
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layout
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 showed a public
beach
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 and a castle which was disused,
whereas
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 the present layout shows a clear growth in the commercial and residential facilities.
According to
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 what is shown, the Porth Harbour in 2000, there was a castle near the public
beach
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, the car parks were small,
while
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 there
was
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were
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 two car parks, beside one of the parks there were showers and toilets,
as well as
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 there was a fishing boat beside the other. The
beach
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 was public to all people. In terms of Porth Harbour today, the castle is replaced with a hotel,
on the other hand
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, the major part of the
beach
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 become private to the hotel. There still
have
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has
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 been a public
beach
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 on the opposite side. Café and shops are built beside marine private yachts near the road.

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Try to provide a clearer comparison between the maps, highlighting specific changes more directly.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your writing and help guide the reader.
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Clarify the details of the developments and provide more context around their significance.
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The essay provides a good overall view of the changes in Porth Harbour.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction effectively sets the context.

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