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2024) There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: describe the problems explain how these problems are affecting you and others suggest what could be done about it give me analysis and photo transcpition

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 [letter] to express the difficulties which are faced by me and several others
while
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traveling
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travelling
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 on public transport. I am a professor at Seneca College. The subway service is used by me on [a] frequent basis. I have been using the subway
since
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for
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 three years and I have not had any complaints
with
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about
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 that.
However
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, recently the delay
on
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in
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 train arrival has seen significant growth.
This
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 issue was not just faced by me. There [are] plenty of others who are suffering from
this
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. Late arrivals can lead to showing up late at work, which can halt the day-to-day task progression.
Moreover
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, if it continues to occur, it will affect the number of sales
on
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of
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 transit
pass
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passes
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. People will become intolerant to
use
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using
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 public transport. I believe we are at the stage from which we can still recover. Adding more trains on the track
reduce
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reduces
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 the delay by a large number.
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, there will be more space to accommodate the passengers.
The
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I
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 hope you take
this
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 request
of
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for
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 improvement on your hand and make some changes
in
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to
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 the public commute system. Yours sincerely, Jojo

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coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance the logical flow of your ideas by using more linking phrases to connect your thoughts.
task achievement
Make sure to maintain a formal tone consistently throughout your letter.
task achievement
The letter addresses the recipient formally, which is appropriate for a complaint letter.
task achievement
You effectively identify the problem and its impact on yourself and others, indicating a good understanding of the task requirements.
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