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(2024) People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter, describe the problems explain how it is affecting people say what the company should do to help give me analysis and photo transcpition

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to indicate the unsatisfactory situation that we are facing with the internet service. I am a professor
of
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at
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 Seneca College. There [are] classes, which I had to undertake online for which the internet is necessary.
Although
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 the service and speed your internet provider [offers]
is
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are
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 absolutely amazing, I am constantly facing buffers because of
slow
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a slow
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 network. Because of the
issue
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issue,
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 I had difficulties conducting virtual classes. There are several other people in
North
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the North
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 York area going through the same
situations
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situation
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. The resentment and bad reputation of the company
is
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are
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 growing quickly as it cannot provide sufficient speed to the users. Like me, individuals who have to work from home are frustrated. The latency and fluctuation of the connection
makes
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make
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 it impossible to work remotely.
This
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 situation can be handled swiftly. I would deeply appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
install
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installed
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 more towers in our location to improve the speed. Yours sincerely, Jojo

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task achievement
Consider providing specific examples of how the internet issues have negatively impacted your work and the daily lives of people in your area.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate different points in your letter into distinct paragraphs to enhance readability.
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The letter effectively addresses the issue and clearly states the request for improvement.
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The tone of the letter is polite and professional, appropriate for a letter to a service provider.
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