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The chart compares worldwide production of bicycles and cars over a fifty-year period.

The chart compares worldwide production of bicycles and cars over a fifty-year period.
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The bar chart provides key information about the
production
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 of
cars
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 and
bicycles
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, measured in millions, over the period shown.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the manufacturing of
cars
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 and
bicycles
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 increases throughout the timeframe.
In addition
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, the transportation industry tended to produce
cars
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 more than
bicycles
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.
However
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, the output numbers in the first period were almost the same.
According to
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 the graph,
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cars
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car
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production
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 showed a significant and consistent increase, in the early years, vehicles saw a slow growth until 1970,
they
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when they
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 rose significantly to about 45
million
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cars
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, after that, the figures continued to rise, with 100
million
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 in 1980 and 180 in 1990.The peak reached in 2000 to about 210
million
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vehicle
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vehicles
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.
On the other hand
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, even though car
production
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 was higher than bicycle
production
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. The manufacturing of
bicycles
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 showed a noticeable increase.In 1950, the industry manufactured around 100 thousand
bicycles
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.
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, these numbers increased rapidly, reaching around 25
million
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 units in 1980, afterward, they experienced slow growth in the
last
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 decade, rising from around 35
million
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 in 1990 to 50
million
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 by the end of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, cars, bicycles, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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