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Infuture all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside this will be passengers. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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In the coming days, motor vehicles will be automated leaving only passengers on board.
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 seems to promote more safety on roads, the majority of professional
drivers
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 will lose their jobs compromising their economic status.
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, their driving skills will probably go down the drain.
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 essay will argue that the upsides of driverless cars outweigh the downsides. On the one hand, the rate of road traffic
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 will be vastly reduced. Normally, human
drivers
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 get fatigued after driving long distances predisposing them to careless driving
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 causing fatal
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.
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, they need to change shifts in order to adequately rest.
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, in Kenya, the proportion of
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 involving
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long-distance trucks accounted for 95% in 2023. These
drivers
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 majorly drove 1000
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 without any breaks or
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 between
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.
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, following the strict traffic rules enacted but the government during the same year, there was a significant decline in the number of
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 incidences after ten months.
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, a great number of skilled
drivers
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 are most likely to lose their jobs.
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, their expertise and skills will go
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 waste since they won't have a platform to showcase their talents.
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 will not only lead to a loss of income but
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 will affect their mental status because losing a job is
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 stressful.The availability of automated cars in the Netherlands is a classic example. Recently, my aunt visited the city and she was privileged to tour the town in a driverless car.
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 was an incredible experience for her, as she narrated
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 because the vehicle only required instructions. In conclusion, in the near future, vehicles will have no
drivers
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 but passengers only.
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 will be beneficial as there will be fewer
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 on the roads even if people will be replaced at their jobs,
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this
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 impact will not be as great.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly supports your thesis statement by connecting ideas more cohesively. You could use transitional phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
While you provided a solid argument, make sure to clearly state your points in relation to the essay question. Elaborate more on how the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear position and arguments for both sides, showing an understanding of the topic.
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The examples given to support your arguments, such as the situation in Kenya, were relevant and informative, enhancing your points.
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