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The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart displays the cost
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 Euros of various types of
bread
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 per kilogram in a specific European region from 2001 to 2005.
Overall
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, there was an upward trend in
bread
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 prices during
this
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 period, despite the increase in the cost of wholegrain
bread
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.
While
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 the
price
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 of wholegrain
bread
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 saw a dramatic decline after peaking, the prices of both brown and white
bread
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 continued to rise.
In contrast
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, the
price
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 of rye
bread
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 remained nearly stable. In 2001, wholegrain
bread
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 was the most expensive variety at €0.80, peaking at €1.80 the following year.
However
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,
this
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 figure decreased significantly, returning to its original
price
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 of €0.80 by 2005.
On the other hand
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, rye
bread
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 maintained a consistent
price
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 over the years, remaining the cheapest option at €0.60. Brown
bread
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, which
also
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 started at €0.60 in 2001, experienced substantial
price
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 growth, becoming the most expensive type by 2005 at €1.60. Meanwhile, the
price
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 of white
bread
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 increased gradually, reaching nearly €1.30 in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bread, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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