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The graph shows the number of overseas visitors (in thousands) to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. The three areas are: The coast (blue line) The mountains (orange line) The lakes (gray line) The coast: Around 40,000 visitors in 1987 Slight dip in early 1990s, then steady increase Reached about 75,000 by 2007 The mountains: Around 20,000 visitors in 1987 Gradual and steady increase Reached around 35,000 by 2007 The lakes: Around 10,000 visitors in 1987 Sharp rise from 1987 to around 2002 (peaking at 75,000) Then a sharp decline to around 50,000 by 2007

The graph shows the number of overseas visitors (in thousands) to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. The three areas are: The coast (blue line) The mountains (orange line) The lakes (gray line) The coast: Around 40,000 visitors in 1987 Slight dip in early 1990s, then steady increase Reached about 75,000 by 2007 The mountains: Around 20,000 visitors in 1987 Gradual and steady increase Reached around 35,000 by 2007 The lakes: Around 10,000 visitors in 1987 Sharp rise from 1987 to around 2002 (peaking at 75,000) Then a sharp decline to around 50,000 by 2007
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The line chart illustrates and provides key information about overseas
visitors
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 in a European country for three different areas between 1987 and 2007. The data is expressed as number of
visitors
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.
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, it is clear from the graph that the
coast
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 had experienced the highest
rate
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.
In addition
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, the lakes saw a conversant
rate
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,
whereas
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 the mountains had a slow growth.
According to
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 what is shown, the
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coast
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 started at 40 in 1987 and
then
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 declined to about 35 in 1992. Throughout the decade, the
coast
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 rose steadily to about 75 and
then
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 declined to 50 numbers of
visitors
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 in 2007.
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, the lakes started at the lowest
rate
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 accounting for 10 in 1987, which
then
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 reached its peak of 75 in 2002. The lakes began at 20 in 1987 and grew slowly
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 around 35 in 2007. The graph highlights a clear trend of presenting
visitors
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 to Europe overseas. The
coast
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,
in particular
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, stood out with significantly the highest
rate
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,
while
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 the mountains remained the lowest.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, coast, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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