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The pie charts below give information about the population of South Korea in 2000 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below give information about the population of South Korea in 2000 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
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 information about the population of South Korea in 2000 and 2050.
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 the population between 15-59
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 was the most in 2000 and 2050  Looking at
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 and Italy in 2000 in more detail . the
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 0-14
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 was 50.1% and 14.3% in Italy so
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Yemen
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 had more than Italy . and the orange
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between 15-59
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 in
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the
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bigger than
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 after that the people who old +60
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 in
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 they accounting for 3.6% and 24.1% in
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Italy ,
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Italy was the bigger .
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 , in 2050 in
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 the population
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0-14
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 at 37.0% and
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Italy was 11.5% , for
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15-59
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57.3% and 46.2% in Italy ,
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for 60+
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5.7% and Italy
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 for 42.3% . In the end, in 2000 the Yeman had 0-14
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 and 15-59
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 bigger than +60
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 , and in Italy had the
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 the biggest , in
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2050 the
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 in
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 was the bigger than +60
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while
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 and +60
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 are the bigger than
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, yemen, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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