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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing
this
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 to
became
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 a part of the coming
job related
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job-related
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 seminar which to going to
held
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head
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 overseas next month. I just want to know about the basic information required to attend the gathering. Foremost, it will be easier for me to
take
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get
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a
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apply
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permission from my company to participate, if you provide me with the exact dates of
event
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. I would
also
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 like to query about the
lenght
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length
 of the program to prepare myself
accordingly
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.
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, kindly tell me about the accommodation facilities, whether they are going to provide the rooms for the guests or it will be the responsibility of the participants.
Moreover
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, I would like to know the total
expences
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expenses
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 like
cost
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the cost
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 of transportation and hospitality (if
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). It will be a
privilage
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privilege
 for me to be a part of
this
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 event as it will be
great
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a great
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opprtunity
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opportunity
 to enhance my work
knowlegde
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knowledge
 and make new connections. Yours Faithfully, Rajpreet Singh

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure you use proper phrases and conjunctions to reinforce the logical flow of your ideas. For instance, use 'Additionally' or 'Furthermore' when introducing new points.
task achievement
Make sure to check for spelling and grammatical errors. Words like 'became' should be 'become', and 'privilage' should be 'privilege'. Small inaccuracies can affect clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Try to structure each paragraph around a single idea. This will help improve the readability of your letter.
task achievement
You effectively expressed your purpose for writing the letter and clearly outlined the information you are seeking.
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Your closing statement reflects enthusiasm for the seminar, which is a positive tone to convey.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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