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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or bulding they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In
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 day and age, a large percentage of
people
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 want to learn about the
history
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 of the places that they live,
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 as houses, departments and buildings. There are a
lot
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 of reasons
about
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for
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 but, recently,
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internet
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the internet
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 and television shows have been discussing
about
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the importance of
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 topic.
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, the number of fake news about
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 theme is increasing so we need to check our
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 and,
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 reason, the
internet
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 and old
people
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is
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are
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 important to us.
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, in the
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 ten
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 a
lot
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 of different television programmes have been talking
and
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about and
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 showing the importance of knowing the value of
the
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old things like watches, books, furniture, carpets and even houses.
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 increasing interest in
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 kind of
things
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 could be one of the reasons
which
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why
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people
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who
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apply
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want to find
about
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out about
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 the
history
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 of the
house
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 or building they live in. Eventually,
this
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 could have a great cultural impact if
people
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 found something,
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, in Talca city workers found undergrown tunnels in the city
while
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 they were digging in the garden of a
house
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. Obviously, situations like
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 make
in
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us
to
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want to learn more about our constructions and cities.
On the other hand
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, we can search
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information
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for information
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in
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on
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internet
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 and the AI. Those are good tools to
learn
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learning
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 about our cities and neighbourhoods,
also
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, with the help of
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internet
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the internet
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 we can know if
it
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something is true or false.
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, years ago a
lot
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 of
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 kid believed that their schools were
building
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built
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 in old graveyards and, without the
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 help, they
cannot
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could not
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researched
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research
be researched
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about
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apply
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this
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information
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.
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, with
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the internet
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internet
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internet,
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 we can make a fast check about our places and constructions.
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,
other
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another
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 way to have
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 about the
history
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 of the
house
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 or building could be
talk
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to talk
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 with an old neighbour because
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this
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these
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people
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 know a
lot
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 of different histories of the past. In conclusion, if someone is interested in the
history
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 of their
house
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 they need to be careful about the
information
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 because, maybe, that could be
a fake news
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fake news
a piece of fake news
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 and the best way to learn about the
history
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 of some place is
talking
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by talking
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 with old
people
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 because they have a
lot
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 of knowledge.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to ensure that each idea in your essay clearly supports your main argument. Sometimes the link between ideas could be stronger.
Task Achievement
Consider expanding your points with more elaboration or examples, as this would make your ideas clearer and more comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on grammatical accuracy and spelling to enhance the professionalism of your writing. For instance, 'departments' should be 'apartments' and 'internet and old people is important' should be 'the internet and older people are important'.
Positive Highlight
Your introduction clearly states the topic and sets the stage for the rest of the essay, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
Positive Highlight
You provided examples to support your points, which is a strong aspect of your writing.
Positive Highlight
You demonstrated a relevant interest in cultural impacts and the role of technology in research, which adds depth to your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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