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The table below shows the production of milk in four countries in 1990 2000 w2010

The table below shows the production of milk in four countries in 1990 2000 w2010
The table depicts annual
milk
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 production in four different countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. In 1990,
milk
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 was mostly used by the citizens of
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 (11,262,000
litres
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)
while
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 Guatemala produced the lowest amount of
milk
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 which was 26,000
litres
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. The trend was the same in 2010 as 11,466,000
litres
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 of
milk
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was
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were
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 produced in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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while
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 only 84,000
litres
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 of
this
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 dairy product was made in Guatemala. In Australia, 11,246,000
litres
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 of
milk
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 was manufactured in 2000, but
this
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 amount surprisingly decreased
upto
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up to
 9,165,000
litres
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 in 2010. In 1990, Tanzania made 87,000
litres
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 of
milk
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 which rose to 155,000
litres
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 in 2010.
Overall
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 produced the highest amount of
milk
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 than
rest
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the rest
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 of the three countries.
Additionally
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, Australia was the only country whose
milk
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 manufacturing business decreased from 2000 to 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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