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In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue? Beka 2

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Nowadays, there are a multitude of energy-enhancing
drugs
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 used by
competitors
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 in competitions. Doping is very harmful to well-being, as it affects all vital organs, to achieve maximum strength in a short period of time. Competitions must be in see of a commission that will be responsible for checking the sportsmen. Doping is very dangerous for sportsmen, since the loads in professional sports themselves are very harmful to well-being, and doping is added to
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 substance is very dangerous not only for physical but
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 for mental health. Some
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 can cause depression and mood swings. Many, in order to achieve results, neglect the rules for the consumption of doping and use it in especially large doses. Doping can lead to rapid ageing, deterioration of vision, deterioration of hearing, high blood pressure, hormonal imbalance,
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 other more deplorable consequences.
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, there are activities where doping is legal
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 as bodybuilding. In
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 sport, many people have already died or become disabled
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 the large use of doping. Measures that can help completely get rid of doping in activities: testing
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 more often than once a month, at least once a week, conducting a doping test before the athlete's performance, and prohibiting at the legislative level all
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 that can be classified as doping.
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, nowadays, despite the work of the anti-doping authorities, many
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 find a way to hide the employ of doping. Now the commissions that monitor athletes check them once a month for doping in the body, but
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 is not enough because doping can be very quickly removed from the body. Many athletes take advantage of
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 and simply remove all doping from the body before the commission arrives. In conclusion, there are a lot of energy-enhancing
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 employed by
competitors
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 in
competitions
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. Sportsmen risk their well-being and future by using doping. Sports authorities should do their job better because the life of an athlete directly depends on their work.

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introduction
Expand on your introduction to provide a clearer overview of the issues related to doping in sports. This will help set the context for your essay more effectively.
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Consider providing more detailed examples or case studies to support your main points on the dangers of doping and the efficacy of proposed measures.
cohesion
Work on ensuring smoother transitions between paragraphs to improve overall flow and clarity. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
idea
You clearly identified serious health risks associated with doping, showcasing your understanding of the problem.
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Your suggested measures to combat doping are practical and demonstrate critical thinking about the issue.
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