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In numerous nations, there is a growing trend for individuals to frequently discuss financial matters, such as their earnings or expenditures, in everyday conversation. What are the reasons behind this phenomenon? Is it advantageous or detrimental? Angsa 2

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Financial
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 are the most common
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 people because
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the news
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 about
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the economic
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economic
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, today I will explain
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 matter with
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disadvantages
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one
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 hand, when
folk's
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people's
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 talking about their financial matters that means
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 complain or
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want
 to improve his self, but when the guy
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 to the wrong person it will problem
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 him because he
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 himself to his friend,
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 is every feller has his own budget sometimes he is spook to his wife,
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 to agree
for spending
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 money wisely on his expenditures.
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 the other hand, few
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people can
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advise
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how
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on how
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 to manage financial matters to take
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control of their
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 and not
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his
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their
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 cash in
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 way.
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, young people can ask
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guidance
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their
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 parents to learn from their mistakes and avoid
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losing money in
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an unproper
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unproper
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improper
 way, or how to enhance
his
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their
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 career by taking
cources
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courses
 or
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a diploma
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. In conclusion,
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 mouth in
somthing
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something
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crucial thing and need to be
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careful
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also
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 be sharp
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about
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who
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whom
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 and why you'll
gave
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sensitve
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sensitive
 information.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the introduction to clearly outline your main points. A well-structured introduction sets the tone for the essay and helps the reader understand your argument better.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer and more coherent transitions between your points. This will help guide the reader smoothly through your ideas.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and spelling. Errors in these areas can detract from the overall clarity of your writing.
task achievement
Develop your ideas further by providing more specific examples and explanations to support your points.
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You presented both advantages and disadvantages of discussing financial matters, which is essential for a balanced argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial matters
  • earnings
  • expenditures
  • transparency
  • stigma
  • supportive environment
  • financial literacy
  • personal finance
  • social media influencers
  • cultural shift
  • taboo
  • mental health
  • peer comparison
  • consumer-driven societies
  • wealth
  • status
  • motivation
  • anxiety
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