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The chart below the percentage of household in owner and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

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The bar chart compares the illustrates of the proportion of households in owner and rented
accommodation
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two
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in two
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 different countries namely England and Wales from 1918 to 2011
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, the percentage of households in owner
accommodation
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increase
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,
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, the
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 for rented property decreased over the period shown.
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,
initially
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,
move
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people lived in rented
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accommodation
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accommodations
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, but home ownership became more common over the final thirty. In 1918, the percentage of homeowners was lower than rented
household
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households
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 by 60%.
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, declined to under 80% in 1939, but the
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 remained stable in 1953 before declining to in 1071.
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, in 1918 the household in
owner
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the owner
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have
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had
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20
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than 20
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%. After, from 1939 to 1953 the percentage of homeowners grew up and remained stable
more
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at more
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30
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than 30
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%.
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, the
figure
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 still increased to 50% in 1971. Which was equal
with
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to
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 the
figure
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 for From 1971, onward the
figure
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 for households in rented
accommodation
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only
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was only
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30
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than 30
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% in 2001, and
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 declined by 5% in 2011,
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 homeownership increased and reached a peak of approximately 70% in 2001, but
then
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, decreased to just below 65% in the
last
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 year

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Content
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