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More and more countries are making university education completely free for their citizens. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Nowadays, there is an increasing trend among the nations allowing the residents to access
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the
university
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 without having to
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 benefits and negative aspects. In
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 essay, first of all, the advantages are going to be discussed. Second of all, I will
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 the disadvantages of
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 advancement.
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. On one hand, allowing
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citizens free access to
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university
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numerous positive outcomes
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 as the
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 of the lower classes that can not afford
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 a career.
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society will be more
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 since it has more professionals in the country that can enhance
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 sectors. To illustrate
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University
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 of California confirm that
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public access to
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 leads to improvements in various fields of the nation
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 as medicine and engineering.
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,
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 development has many expensive costs for the government, given that, the
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 of all the residents will be paid with
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public money. A consequence of
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 is that the budget for other public services will be lower,
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as healthcare
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maintenance
 leading to
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poor quality of
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 services.
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, social studies show that making
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education
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 free does not mean that
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people
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 going to study,
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due to
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this
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 privilege will become an
acustomed
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 thing for the populace and people will not be engaged to study.
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 format of
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 has great upsides for the development of the country and for the residents that live in it, plus, it will enhance the quality of life of the citizens that decide to study in the
university
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.
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,
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 advancement has
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 drawbacks including the decline of municipal services.

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Task Achievement
The introduction could be clearer. Consider rephrasing it to explicitly state your views on the advantages and disadvantages of free university education. This helps set the stage for your discussion more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to proofread for small grammar mistakes, such as 'paid' instead of 'paying'. Correcting these issues can improve the overall clarity of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
In the conclusion, restate the main points clearly rather than introducing new information. A stronger closing can reinforce your arguments more effectively.
Task Achievement
You have effectively identified both advantages and disadvantages of free university education, demonstrating a balanced view on the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay structure is logical, with clear separation of points in each paragraph, making it easy to follow your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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