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The charts below give information about the purposes of travel for passengers using four different uk airports in 2016

The charts below give information about the purposes of travel for passengers using four different uk airports in 2016
The graph provides information about the
percentage
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 of passengers using
airports
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 for different
purpose
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purposes
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 in 2016 in terms of 4 classifications namely Gatwick, Heathrow, Luton and Stansted
airport
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.
Overall
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, visiting friends and family gradually increased over the measured period.
While
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 holiday dropped slowly.
Additionally
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, visiting friends and family was the highest figure among all
airports
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. The usage of
airports
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 in 2016. Holiday and visiting friends and family showed a much bigger figure with 54% and 30% from Gatwick
Airport
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 compared to other categories. The figure for them declined and increased to 33% and 37% from Heathrow
airport
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. The
percentage
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 of passengers used 50% and 35% from Luton
Airport
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 and the
percentage
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 of users from Stansted
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airport
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Airport
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 declined and increased to 48 and 36%. The
percentage
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 of customers used Gatwick
airports
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. Business and others were smaller for the remaining category with 14 and 2% in 2016. The
percentage
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 of
castumers
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customers
 number increased to 4 and 26 % for
use
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using
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 Heathrow
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airport
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Airport
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. Luton and Stansted
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airport
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airports
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 experienced
level-off
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a level-off
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 and a rise
2
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of 2
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% and 14% in 2016.For other
purpose
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purposes
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 was the lowest category among all
airports
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, airports, airport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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