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The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the
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 distribution of visitors from the UK to Spain in the years 1983 and 2003.
Overall
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, the data reveals a shift in the
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 profile of UK visitors over the 20-
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 period. In 1983, the majority of travellers were aged 35-54,
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 by 2003, the
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 range was more evenly spread, with a noticeable increase in both the youngest and oldest
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 groups. In 1983, the largest segment of visitors was the 35-54
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age
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group
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, accounting for 50% of the total.
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 was followed by the 25-34
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age
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group
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 at 20%, and the 55+
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age
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group
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 at 16%. The younger
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group
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, 16-24 years and 0-15 years, represented smaller proportions, at 10% and 4% respectively. By 2003, the proportion of 35-54-
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-olds dropped to 35%,
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 it remained the largest
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. The 55+ category grew significantly, rising from 16% to 26%,
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 the 0-15
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age
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group
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also
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 increased notably, from 4% to 12%.
Conversely
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, the proportion of travellers in the 25-34
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age
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group
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 decreased to 12%, and the 0-15
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age
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group
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also
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 saw a slight increase to 12%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, year, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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