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Many people feel that students should learn from online materials while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A lot of people see that students should learn from online
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 others feel that it is better to have printed
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, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
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, in my opinion, I see
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 better to
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 online
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 rather than printed ones because I see it faster and easier
for example
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 if someone wants to
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 for his exam by
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online
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, all he
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 to take is a laptop or whatever device he
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 but the huge negative it is sometimes it dependent on the internet
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 if you
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 a lot of time
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 think it is not the best
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 for you because there
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 some places have no signal so you have to go somewhere else, the online
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 are usually more expensive
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 printed ones.
secondly
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, there are a lot of people who prefer printed
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 they say it is right
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 to it you will
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 faster than online because you can switch to any page and write anything without lagging or anything weird may happen on online and you can
study
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 wherever you want without afraid of cutting internet or something like that.
to conclude
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, there are many opinions and ideas you can
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, whatever you see is the better
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 to
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use
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 it because everyone has his own
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 of studying and there is no problem
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 all the
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 what is better and
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task achievement
Try to improve the clarity and precision of your arguments. Each point should be clearly articulated and supported with examples or explanations.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that your essay flows logically from one point to another. Use cohesive devices to connect your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
The essay presents both views on the topic, which shows an understanding of the task requirement.
coherence and cohesion
You have made a clear attempt to express your personal opinion at the end of the essay, which helps to conclude your arguments effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • retention
  • comprehension
  • distractions
  • interactive
  • multimedia
  • engagement
  • digital eye strain
  • current knowledge
  • outdated materials
  • learning styles
  • benefits
  • challenges
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