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The charts below give information al1out the origin of crude oil imports to the US in 2012 and about the percentage of imports as a share of US crude oil consumption.

The charts below give information al1out the origin of crude oil imports to the US in 2012 and about the percentage of imports as a share of US crude oil consumption.
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The two charts provide key information about the
crude
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oil
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 origin, which
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imports
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was imported
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 to the US in 2010 and the consuming percentages of the imported
oil
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crude
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 as a share.
Overall
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,
United
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 States was the largest origin of
crude
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oil
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imports
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.
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, most of the
imports
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 came from
America
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 itself, followed by Canada and the Middle East. Meanwhile, the US reduced its dependence on
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oil
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imports
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 over the period shown.
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 the pie chart,
America
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 had the largest share of
oil
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imports
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, with 39% in 2012. Canada came second with 24%, followed by the Middle East at 17%. Latin
America
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 and Africa contributed 8% and 9%.
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 the other regions made the lowest contributions in importing
crude
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oil
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 to the United States, with 6%. The bar chart shows the
consuming
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 of imported
oil
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 in
America
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 from 2005 to 2012. Between 2005 and 2006 the consumption rate was stable at 60%,
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 percentage dropped slightly to 55% in 2007. In the
last
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 quarter of the
period
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this
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 percentage continued to decline until the final year of the timeframe, which had the lowest level of dependency on imported
oil
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, falling to 40%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crude, oil, imports, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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