Some people say now that we can see films on our phones or tablet there is no need to go to the cinemas, others say to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that watching films is a very common habit
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the
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people
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these days.
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it is a commonly held belief that no need to pay
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films in the cinemas, there is
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an argument that suggests watching
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in the
cinema
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is more fun.
This
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essay will analyse
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
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hand,
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had
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made our
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lives
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easier.
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, anyone who has a
smart phone
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smartphone
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, tablet, or
lapotop
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laptop
can watch
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movies
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and series anytime and anywhere.
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, going to the
cinema
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needs a budget and some
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could not
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cannot
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afford it.
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, teenagers may not have money to go with their friends to watch
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.
On the other hand
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, going to the
cinema
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is
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and
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an
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amazing experience for most
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people
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. It is
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possible to say that many families and friends prefer to go and watch a film
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together on vacations and holidays.
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, some
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are filmed by using special tools to film it and it require seeing at in the
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.
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, some
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were filmed
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with
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specific techniques
such
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as
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3D, and 2D, and
people
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may not enjoy and experience the movie fully if they watch it at the house because of the sound
effect
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effects
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that are used by the producers. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to the question. On balance,
however
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, I believe that
watch
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watching
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movies
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in the
cinema
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is much more fun.

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Task Achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines both sides of the argument and your opinion more definitively. Consider rephrasing it to emphasize these points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the transitions between points to enhance flow. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for spelling errors and typographical mistakes (e.g., 'techonology', 'lapotop', 'and amazing') to improve readability and professionalism in your writing.
Task Achievement
In your conclusion, state your opinion clearly and restate the main reasons that support it to reinforce your argument.
Task Achievement
You have successfully identified and discussed both sides of the argument, showcasing a balanced view.
Task Achievement
The examples you provided about teenagers and special filming techniques effectively supported your points.
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