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The table below shows the result of a survey asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the result of a survey asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 table indicates a statistical breakdown of survey reports of Scottish people participating in various cultural
activities
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 in the previous year.
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, the table clearly shows that the participation rate
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activities
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 in the 16-24
age
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 group is the highest, except for undertaking any crafts, cultural purchases and
computer based
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computer-based
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activities
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. The
age
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 group from 16 to 24 obviously has the largest participation rate in 3
activities
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, Any Performance, Any Visual Arts and Any Writing with a percentage of 35, 30,
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 and have a low rate
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 three
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, undertaking any crafts, Cultural Purchases, Computer Based, respectively, are 11,11,10. As for the
age
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 group, all 16 years old, the first four
activities
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 are quite high and the remaining two
activities
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 are rarely involved.
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, the older
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 groups (25–44 and 44–74) made up larger proportions related to crafts and culture. Yet, they showed the least interest in the other two pursuits any writing and computer-based.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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