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The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada 1996, 2006 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada 1996, 2006 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
provides
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 information about the number of
people
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 who are native
at
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to
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 speaking different
languages
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 in
cnada
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Canada
 in the three years 1996,2006 and 2016.
Overall
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,the
people
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 who are native
at
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apply
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speaking English take the biggest part on the three charts.
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,In the first two
years
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 the percentage of native speakers who spoke French was more than the
people
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 who are Non-official
languages
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.In the
last
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 year,The percentage of
the
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people
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are
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speak
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 Non-official
languages
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 exceeded the
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people
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number of people
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 who
spoke
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 French. In 1996,
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people
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the people
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 who are native to English was 60% ,But
it
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this
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 decreased in 2006 and 2016
for
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around by 2% respectively.
Moreover
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, in 1996,the
people
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 who were good at speaking French were 22% of the chart ,But it decreased slightly in 2006 to 22%.
In addition
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, it continued to decrease until it reached 21% in 2016 . In 1996,
peoplpe
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people
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are
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speak
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 Non-official
languages
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 were taken the smallest sector which is 17%.
similarly
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 in 2006,The
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percentage
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 of
the
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people
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are
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speak
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 Non-official
languages
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were
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 20% which is
also
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 the smallest part,but in
comparision
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comparison
 with 2016 there is a
slightly different
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slight difference
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 between the other two years .because the
percantage
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percentage
 of the Non-official language
are
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 more than French native speakers .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, languages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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