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The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.

The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.
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The projected costings over the next five years in
West
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Africa
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, Central
America
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 and
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South-east
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Southeast
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Asia
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 for environmental projects
is
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 shown in the table
while
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 there are four expected
expenditure
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expenditures
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: set-up costs, salaries, training and office
expenses
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 in
Year
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 1 is shown in the pie charts. The cost is
meassured
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measured
 in US dollars. In general,
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South-east
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Southeast
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Asia's
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Asia
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 will spend the highest expense in the next
five
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year
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 projects among
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.
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 Central
America
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's
expenses
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 will gradually decrease from
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 1 to
year
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 5,
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South-east
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Southeast
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Asia
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 will increase their cost in
the
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year
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 3 and
West
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America
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 will increase their cost in the fifth
year
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. In the first
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,
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South-east
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Southeast
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Asia
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 will spend 30
million
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Dollar
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for
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on
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 the sustainable project
while
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West
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Africa
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 only spend
one third
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from
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of
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South-east
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Asia
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. Central
America
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 will spend 20
million
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 in the first
year
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 which
make
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 Central
America
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is
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the second
higher
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country to spend on
the
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sustainable
project
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projects
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. The highest
expenses
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 in the first
year
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 will be salaries which make
50
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up 50
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% of the
over all
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overall
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expense
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expenses
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 set-up costs will take 30% of
expenses
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, training and office
expenses
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 will take 10% respectively. In the second
year
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,
West
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Africa
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 will spend the least with 7.5
million
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Dollar
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while
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 Central
America
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 will spend 12
million
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South-east
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Southeast
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Asia
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 will spend 20
million
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. In the third
year
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,
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Asia
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 will increase their
invest
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 by 40
million
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Dollar
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while
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 Central
America
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 and
West
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Africa
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 only spend 5
million
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 and 2.5
million
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 respectively. Central
America
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 will spend the same expense until
fifth
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year
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while
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Southeast
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South-east
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Asia
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 will spend 50
million
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 in
fourth
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 and fifth
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year
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years
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.
Lastly
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,
West
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Africa
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 will spend 2.5
million
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Dollar
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Dollars
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 in
fourth
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the fourth
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year
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 and
increased
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to
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it to
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 3.5
million
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Dollar
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 in
fifth
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the fifth
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year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words west, africa, america, south-east, asia, expenses, year, million, dollar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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