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(2024) You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter, describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

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Dear
sir
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 or
madam
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, I am writing
this
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 letter as a token of appreciation
toward
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for
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 a cookery which I finished recently. The class not just only provided me with the fundamentals of cooking,
it
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but it
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also
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 made me a part
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community.
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 I did not know how to prepare a single dish when I started,
at the end
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 of the course I was able to
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prepare
 multiple items. I really adored the weekend sessions, where we had to present a completely new homemade dish.
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last
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 weekend one of the participants made
an
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 homemade cheesecake and shared
with
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it with
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 all the members. Owing to
this
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 class, I am frequently preparing the food for my family. I used to cook twice a week but now I am
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 to cook four
time
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 a week. As I am preparing new dishes
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, I am improving my knowledge as well. If I would be able to make a request, I would suggest
to offer
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offering
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 a new class, which can focus
of
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on
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 cakes and decoration. I really appreciate the blowing of teaching you provided me. Yours sincerely, Jojo.

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Try to include a more detailed description of the specific dishes you learned to prepare in order to enhance your response.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for minor spelling mistakes, such as 'prepart' and 'inclose', which can affect clarity.
task achievement
Consider providing more context on how the course changed your confidence or skills, as this would add depth to your feedback.
task achievement
Great use of personal anecdotes to illustrate your experience in the class.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a friendly and appreciative tone throughout, which is suitable for this type of correspondence.
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