In some countries, many people choose to educate children at home by themselves instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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years, the number of
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that educate their
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at home has increased significantly. Some
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think that individual education at home can be more effective and healthier for children. But some
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can learn from
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problem is one of the most difficult and
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, which
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can’t solve because of different opinions. The first side
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that parents can help their
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with their knowledge and experience until
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graduate.
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experience for
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can be traumatic and painful because of
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control and storage of peers in their social life. But
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the child can be smarter than peers whose parents gave them to
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without individual
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haters who think that
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program will make
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more dumb and problematic. They explain
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by the fact that
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are sitting at home without any contact with peers and adults who can help them in the future with their sociality and place
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have a minus in the view of bullying and harassment from teachers and other students. In conclusion, both programs are good but
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still have opinions that
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have more effective way for the future University and career development. By raising at schools
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more social life; experiences; media and other social activities which can help
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in the future. Issues like bullying and harassment can
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tailor-made curriculum
  • individual learning pace
  • collaborative learning
  • social and emotional development
  • educational resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • learning environment
  • real-world experiences
  • schedule flexibility
  • academic qualifications
  • peer interactions
  • family relationships
  • homeschooling
  • customized education
  • traditional schooling
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