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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have recently taken a two day course .write to give your feedback to the course organiser and say Guve details of the course What did like or dislike about it Give any improvements

Dear Sir or Madam I hope
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 letter finds you well and in good spirits, I am writing
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 letter regarding feedback given to the English class
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 Friday 25th July. I am Alexa, I am looking for a short course to take about English for communications and I saw your course so interesting because there are a lot of agenda that I want to learn
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for
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 example, grammar in your life or how to pronunciation?
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apply
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 etc. First of all, I would like to admire the teacher, he taught very well and clearly in the lessons.
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, he had
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plenty of tools to make us understand easily and he is
very
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 kind person.
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, I understood that we have only two days for a class but a lot of lessons to learn
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, some
lesson
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 went too
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 for me. I would like to recommend you reduce the participant activities and pay more attention
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 the lesson
espectially
Correct your spelling
especially
 the significant lessons
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 as grammar is should be more time taken. I appreciate your help
Your
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 faithfully Alexa

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coherence and cohesion
Try to clarify your main points more explicitly and organize your feedback according to the questions asked. This will help the reader understand your opinions better.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that you have a clear introduction and conclusion in your letter, summarizing your main feedback points.
task achievement
Be careful with grammatical mistakes and phrasing. For example, change 'to pronunciation?' to 'to pronounce.'
coherence and cohesion
Use transition words and phrases to link your ideas more effectively, such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'In conclusion.' This will improve the flow of your letter.
task achievement
You provided specific details about the course, which is great for clarity.
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Your admiration for the teacher adds a positive tone to your feedback, which is commendable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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