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Band 3.5

More and more people decide to eat healthy food and exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this trend? What can be done to encourage more people to eat healthier and exercise?

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It often argued that individuals
are be
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 more interested
about
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 their diet and workout consistently. I am one of
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 decided to change my whole routine gradually. There
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 many
of
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causes,
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 essay will
disuss
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discuss
about
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the view and the main reasons and
i
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 will illustrate my point.
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, It is
essentail
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essential
 to
mentioned
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 that
initiate
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 in fit and active life is
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as
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a present
to
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 yourself. One of the reasons is the wholesome world
is
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 completely changed than before,
Racipes
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Recipes
 offered now
diffrently
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differently
is
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are
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 more delicious
rich
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and rich
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of
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 protein and carp.
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,
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 a period you will discover not just your body is
transfer
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and
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 your mind and mental health.
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, The power
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 impacting is huge, When the influensers
are started
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 to share the
fitnees
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fitnee's
fitnees'
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life
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 a large of people will be affected, No
dobet
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doubt
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have
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high
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 impact on teenagers and adults posting photos and videos with healthy content will
exciting
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humens
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humans
 to be more fit
also
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 picturing of what we drinking became a role.
for instance
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,
The
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green juice , Matcha , the yogurt with dates and shea seeds
has
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beacame
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became
become
the
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popular
dish
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. In conclusion,
although
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 with
this
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 view,
i
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 firmly believe the active world is widely
extanding
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extending
expanding
.
due to
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full
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 of judgment that was not true.
such
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,
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 the healthy food is not tasteful enough or the
exercsie
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exercise
 is tiring more and more.

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task achievement
Your introduction is a bit unclear and contains several grammatical errors. Please clarify your position: it would help to rephrase for better flow and structure.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs are clearly separated and logically linked. Try using more transitional phrases to improve flow.
task achievement
More specific examples and clearer explanations of your points would improve your score in supporting main points. Make sure examples are precise and directly related to your argument.
coherence and cohesion
You demonstrate a personal connection to the topic, which engages readers.
task achievement
You identify relevant modern influences, such as social media, that resonate with many people today.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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