ome people think that living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There is no denying there are some
pepole
Correct your spelling
people
think
Correct pronoun usage
who think
show examples
that living in big
cities
Use synonyms
is bad for
people
Use synonyms
's
health
Use synonyms
, in my opinion
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
think
its
Replace the word
it's
it is
show examples
bad for
Use synonyms
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
health
Use synonyms
that
Correct word choice
and
show examples
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
will give some reasons in
this
Linking Words
essay. On
one
Correct article usage
the one
show examples
hand , if you
lived
Wrong verb form
live
show examples
in big
cities
Use synonyms
your
health
Use synonyms
will go down for many reasons of the reasons is to be having
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
strees
Correct your spelling
stress
street
all the
time
Use synonyms
for
exemple
Correct your spelling
example
if you want to go to
grocery
Add an article
the grocery
show examples
store and you are in
traffic
Add an article
a traffic
show examples
jam you will be
streesd
Correct your spelling
stressed
untill
Correct your spelling
until
you get there, or if you sleep late at night you
willbe
Correct your spelling
will be
waking up late and be late for your work and be
more angry
Replace the words
angrier
show examples
and
streesfull
Correct your spelling
stressful
,
Linking Words
however
Add a comma
however,
show examples
you
also
Linking Words
experince
Correct your spelling
experience
the noise of loud music or car that will
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
show examples
the
qulity
Correct your spelling
quality
of your sleep.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, if you were
Change preposition
in at
show examples
at
Correct your spelling
a
show examples
small town
have
Wrong verb form
that had
show examples
less
Correct quantifier usage
fewer
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
people
Use synonyms
the first thing that
will
Wrong verb form
would
show examples
improve is the
qulity
Correct your spelling
quality
of your sleep as there
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
less pollution in the air which
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
in the
cities
Use synonyms
, there
are
Wrong verb form
would be
show examples
more
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
time
Use synonyms
that you will be end up with more than
cities
Use synonyms
.
However
Linking Words
, in my own experience the towns improve
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Correct your spelling
people
pepole
Correct your spelling
people
health
Use synonyms
in
Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
a lot
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
of different factors as I
mention
Wrong verb form
mentioned
show examples
earlier in the essay
such
Linking Words
as
quilty
Correct your spelling
quality
show examples
of sleep or
have
Wrong verb form
having
show examples
Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
a lot
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
of
time
Use synonyms
to do
Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
a lot
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
of hobbies as you have
Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
a lot
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
of
time
Use synonyms
left In conclusion, the
Correct your spelling
people
pepole
Correct your spelling
people
who live in towns are more healthier than
people
Use synonyms
who
had
Wrong verb form
have
show examples
lived in
cities
Use synonyms
mentally and physically,

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

grammar
Work on your grammar and punctuation to ensure your writing is clearer and more professional. Pay attention to spelling mistakes and consider proofreading your work before submission.
content
Be more specific in your main points and provide more detailed examples. This will help strengthen your argument and make your response more compelling.
cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by using transition words and ensuring that each point relates directly back to the main argument.
task response
You have engaged with the prompt and expressed a clear opinion, which is important for task achievement.
content
You have included personal experiences, which can add relevance and depth to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: