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Band 3.5

: All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in their earliest grades, To what extent do you agree or disagree with statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Undoubtedly, with the progressing globalization, learning second and third
languages
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became
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 more effective among students.
Whereas
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 some people regard starting to study other
languages
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 from childhood as a method to achieve success, others consider it unnecessary. As for my perspective, I am in
favor
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 of the former, and the reasons will be elaborated on thoroughly as follows. Nowadays, more organizations and companies have been requiring bilingual people to access international clients. Youngsters should be familiar with English or other common
languages
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 to enhance their competitiveness. To be more specific, individuals who can speak multiple
languages
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 totally overwhelm someone
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 not have
this
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 ability. Take
my self
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myself
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 as an example. Our high school had a position to go to Korea as a school-exchanger but I cannot speak Korean
fluency
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 me to
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 a chance to
studying
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study
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 in Korea for half
year
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a year
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. In terms of why students be suggested to study different
languages
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eariler
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earlier
. Teenagers have
better
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 capability of
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memory
 and learning
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then
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than
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 adults;
moreover
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, students only need to
concerntrate
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concentrate
their
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 main duty-- studying,
that is
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 the best period to absorb knowledge.
According to
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 an essay from
National
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the National
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 Taiwan University in 2021, children could learn
the
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a
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 second language more effectively and
efficently
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efficiently
 rather than adults,
means
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 teenagers should take advantage of their talents
on
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in
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 learning. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned, learning foreign
languages
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 as early as possible absolutely
improve
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improves
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 their
conpetitiveness
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competitiveness
 and it was proven that childhood is the best period of time to studying different
languages
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task achievement
Consider rephrasing your introduction to clarify your position more definitively. Additionally, ensure that your main points are consistently supported with clear examples throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain clear connections between your ideas and paragraphs. Using linking phrases will help enhance the flow of your essay.
language accuracy
Work on refining your grammar and vocabulary to reduce inaccuracies. For instance, phrases like 'I cannot speak Korean fluency' should be rephrased for clarity.
content
Your essay effectively highlights the importance of learning foreign languages in today's globalized world.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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