IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Behaviour and lifestyles vary from country to country. Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

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Do
yo
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you
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 know that people are very different from
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country
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one country
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 to
other
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another country
other countries
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country
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? .
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?
.
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,There are many things that
makes
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make
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 people who are travelling from
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country
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one country
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 to
othe
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other
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country
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countries
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 change their behaviour and their lifestyle in order to be polite. Being polite ,
it
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apply
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 does not mean that visitors are not polite.In fact, there are many behaviours
are
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that are
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 totally different from
culture
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one culture
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 to
other
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another
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.
For example
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,eating with sound in
Chaina
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China
 means that the food is very
tastey
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tasty
.In
comparision
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comparison
,In
Kuwait
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Kuwait,
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 it means that you
are
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do
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nit
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not
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 respect the
person
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people
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 who
are eat
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are eating
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 with you.

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structure
Make sure to provide a clear introduction and conclusion to your essay. This helps guide the reader and gives your writing a more organized structure.
content
Try to expand on your ideas and provide more examples to support your arguments. This can help you reach a higher score for 'supported main points'.
language
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and punctuation. For instance, avoid run-on sentences and ensure proper spacing after punctuation marks.
content
Good attempt at comparing different cultural practices, which adds depth to your argument.
content
You have identified an important point about politeness being culturally relative, which is a valid perspective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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