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The chart shows the information relating to people within 15-minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.

The chart shows the information relating to people within 15-minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.
The chart illustrates the proportion of
people
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 in rural and urban
areas
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 in a certain region in the UK who have
access
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 to four essential services within a 15-minute drive.
Overall
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,
people
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 living in urban
areas
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 have better
access
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 to all four services compared to those living in rural
areas
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. The greatest disparity can be observed in
access
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 to primary
schools
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,
while
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access
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 to doctors shows
least
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 difference. Nearly 100% of
people
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 living in urban
areas
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 are within a 15-minute of a doctor, post office primary
schools
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 and secondary
schools
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.
In contrast
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,
while
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access
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 for rural residents is relatively high, it is consistently lower in all categories. Specifically, the percentage of rural
people
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 with nearby
access
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 to a doctor and a secondary school is just slightly under 100%, showing minimal disparity.
Access
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 to a post office is slightly lower for rural residents, at around 90%, compared to full coverage for urban dwellers. The most notable difference is in
access
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 to primary
schools
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:
while
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 urban coverage remains near complete, only about 70% of rural residents can reach a primary school within 15 minutes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, areas, access, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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