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The chart shows the information relating to people within 15-minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.

The chart shows the information relating to people within 15-minute drive service in a particular region in the UK. It also compares the people living in urban areas and people living in rural areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given below.
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The chart illustrates the information on the percentage of people in a specific region in the UK who live within a 15-minute drive of four services: a doctor, a post office,a primary
school
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 and a secondary
school
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. The data compares the availability
for
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 people living in both urban and rural areas.
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, all supports are available by 100% for the residents in the city. But there are some
the
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exceptions in suburban areas and these are post
office
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offices
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 and primary
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school
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schools
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,
while
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 the data
of
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for
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doctor
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doctors
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 and secondary
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school
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schools
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 are the same
To begin
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 with, there is a small difference between the health care
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 and the postal
service
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.Nearly all urban
dwellers
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 are within a 15-minute car ride of a doctor,
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 the figure for rural individuals is the same. Regarding postal
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, 100%
residents
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of residents
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 of urban places and around 95%
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dwellers
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of dwellers
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 of rural places live within
15-minute
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15 minutes
 of a post office. If we look at the education facilities, we can see that both urban and rural
dwellers
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 live within
15-minute
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a 15-minute
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service
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 in secondary
school
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. People live within
15-minute
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15 minutes of
 around 100% of primary
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school
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schools
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 for the residents who live in the city.
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, there is only approximately 65% of rural
dwellers
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, service, dwellers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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