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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.
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The line graph provides an overview of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011 during museum
visitors
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 by type from 1997 to 2012.
Overall
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 the number of
adult
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visitors
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 fluctuated
through
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throughout
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all
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apply
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of
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apply
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the period,
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however
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however,
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this
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 figure was constantly the highest position. The
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
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 aged under 15 witnessed a moderate downward
while
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 the figure for special exhibition
visitors
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 saw a minimal upward. In 2007,
Adult
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visitors
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have
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had
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 the highest figures compared to previous years. From 1997 to 2002
Adult
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visitors
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increase
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increased
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lightly
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slightly
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about
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by about
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 300000,
Visitors
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 aged under 15
decrease lightly
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decreased slightly
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over
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by over
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 100000 and Special Exhibition unchanged at 30000. These two years still maintain the same increase. From 2007 to 2012
Adult
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visitors
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 decreased from 400000 to 38000 before
strong
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a strong
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increased
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increase
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100000
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of 100000
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 since 2002. The number of
visitors
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 under 15 saw a minor dip from 2002 to 2007 and remained just under 1500000 in 2012.
Next,
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Special
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the Special
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 Exhibition increased but not exceeding 50000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, adult with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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