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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vechile will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technologies have grown so fast in
current
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 years. It can access
through
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all kinds of daily life products, including
vehicles
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. Having
driverless
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transportation
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 can definitely
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 comfortability to travelers.
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, I
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 that having
vehicles
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 without the
driver
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 will definitely give many benefits to the users and
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 outweigh its disadvantages. On one hand,
driverless
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vehicles
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 create many positive impacts
to
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 society. It can
promotes
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 comfortability to the users. The ones who own a car can set the function for cars to drive by themselves, where the
driver
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 can sit and relax along the way.
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, it can ensure
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for
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the
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passengers
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 they are using public
transportation
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.
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, in China,
driverless
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 taxis and buses have been introduced in recent years, where the passengers do not have to
worried
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 about having arguments with the
driver
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 and they can
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 feel relieved from being harmed by the
driver
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.
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, there are
also
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 drawbacks
on
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the
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driverless
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vehicles
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, since the
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driver’s
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drivers’
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 jobs can
be disappeared
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. In the current era, people are using more
of
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the
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apply
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public
transportation
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 and
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 have their private drivers. If all cars, buses, and trucks
can
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 be driven by themselves, those careers would not be necessary anymore. In consequence, many people would have lost their jobs, which can affect the economy in the future. In conclusion, we are shifting into an Artificial Intelligence era, where technology can help
upgraded
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the
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apply
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vehicles
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 to enhance enjoyability
to
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for
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the
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travelers
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travellers
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. I barely think that
this
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 transformation will encourage people to use more public
transportation
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, which can
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 reduce emissions in the future.

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Task Achievement
Consider providing a more balanced view by discussing more advantages and disadvantages. This will enhance the depth of your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structures and use appropriate linking words to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to proofread your work to correct minor spelling and grammar errors such as 'promotes' instead of 'promote' and 'worried' instead of 'worry'.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic and the introduction sets a good context for the discussion.
Task Achievement
You provided relevant examples, such as the mention of driverless taxis in China, which supports your arguments.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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