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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.
The two diagrams display the variety in spending cash in many different
sectors
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 of
population
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the population
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 from 1971 to 2001 .
Overall
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,there are 7 different
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people
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 spend money on , some
sectors
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 faced remarkable growth
while
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 others faced some declines .
To begin
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 with ,
people
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's interest in buying cars grew
approximately
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 20% which is the greatest surge
between
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 all
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 .
In contrast
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, the population's spending on food faced a dramatic decline .
People
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's spending
in
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on
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 petrol decreased by only 2% which is not a big change .
However
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, restaurants
sellings
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selling
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 increased by the same percentage as it was in 1971 which
s
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was
 7%.
Secondaly
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Secondly
, furniture sellings faced a minimal decrease
by
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 1 % .
Moreover
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 ,
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people
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people's
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 passion
in
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for
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 buying computers faced a steady rise
by
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 10% .
Furthermore
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 ,
people
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's interest in
reasing
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reading
 books decreased gradually by 5% .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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