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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides key information in a particular country where
shops
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 were closing and opening within 8 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a drastic decline in the
number
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 of
shops
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 closing especially in 2015,
however
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, the
number
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 of
shops
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 opening kept fluctuating, but generally decreased in
number
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.
Furthermore
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, the proportion of
shops
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 opening had reached its peak in the year 2011 accounting for almost 9,000
shops
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 even though the following year it dropped to 4,000. By 2014, the
number
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 gradually grew to 6,000
shops
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. A plateau is shown in three consecutive years with a gradual drop in the year 2018, scoring 8,000
shops
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.
Moreover
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, the closures kept a steady increase in
number
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 reaching up to 7,000
shops
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 by 2013,
in contrast
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, by 2015 it reached its lowest having less than 1,000
shops
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 closed.
Accordingly
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, the numbers rose and
then
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 almost had a plateau phase from the years 2016 to 2018 accounting for 5,000
shops
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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