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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a speicies of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a speicies of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the life
cycle
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 of a species of large fish known as the
salmon
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.
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, The life
cycle
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 of the
salmon
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 involves three main
stages-fry
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stages
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, smolt, and adult
salmon
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-and spans across three different habitats:
upper
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the upper
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river
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,
lower
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the lower
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river
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, and the open sea. The complete
cycle
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 takes approximately 10 years or more. The
cycle
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 begins in the upper
river
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, where
salmon
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 lay their
eggs
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 in slow-moving water. These
eggs
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 are located among reeds and small stones to provide protection and support during the early stages of development. After about five to six months, the
eggs
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 transform into small fish known as fry, which
are
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is
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 typically 3 to 8
centimeters
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centimetres
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 long. Once the fry
have
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 developed enough, they move to the lower
river
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, which has faster-flowing water. Here, they continue to grow over a period of approximately four years. During
this
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 time, they transform into smolt, reaching a length of 12 to 15
centimeters
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centimetres
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Following
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this
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, the smolt migrate to the open sea, where they spend around five years maturing into adult
salmon
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. They reach a size of 70 to 76
centimeters
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centimetres
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 and become adults. After completing their growth and development in the ocean, the adult
salmon
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 return to the upper
river
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 to lay their
eggs
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, thereby starting the life
cycle
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 all over again.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cycle, salmon, river, eggs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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