The diagrams below show the life cycle of a speicies of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a speicies of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show the life cycle of a speicies of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustrations depict the maturation cycle of a big fish,
also
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known as the
salmon
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.
Overall
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, there are three stages of transformation are shown,
while
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the first phase is demonstrated more comprehensively than the other two.
In addition
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, the dimensions of them are clearly indicated for the comparison purposes. In the first picture, the initial stage of
salmon
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is illustrated.
Salmon
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eggs are laid beneath the small stones, where the reeds grow. It takes approximately 5 or 6 months for them to become fry in
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a slow
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slow moving
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slow-moving
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upper river. Later,
fry
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the fry
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relocate
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relocated
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to
lower
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the lower
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river, which is fast flowing. They need roughly four years to turn smolt in that environment.
Lastly
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, smolt swims to
open
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the open
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sea, where during
five-year
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a five-year
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period they evolve
to
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into
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adult
salmon
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. Each of these steps
make
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makes
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the fish look different in terms of size.
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the fry is the smallest with 3-8 cm length, adult
salmon
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is measured 70-76 cm.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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