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The bar chart below shows the sectors contributions to India's GDP

The bar chart below shows the sectors contributions to India's GDP
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The given bar graph compares shares of agriculture,
industry
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, and services of India’s GDP from 1960 to 2000, with
ten-year
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a ten-year
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 interval.
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,
while
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 the contribution of agriculture declined significantly, the reverse was true for services.
Moreover
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, the proportion of
industry
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 stayed constant with some variation over the period. At the beginning of the period, the services had the biggest percentage (just over 60%) among all other sectors.
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, it fell to about 14% in 2000.
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, in 1960, Services’ contribution was approximately 15%, and almost doubled over the next 20 years. In the
last
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 10 years,
this
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 figure continued its upward trend and became the dominant in the gross domestic product of India. Regarding
industry
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, it shows the smallest proportion in the first 30 years. The share of
industry
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 experienced a slow increase from 15% to about 25% between 1960 and 1980.
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 it remained the sense until 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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