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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of young
people
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 attending
in
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apply
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four different places of
dance
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classes
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 in a town in Australia, and the bar chart shows the number of students,
sorting
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sorted
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 by
age
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 groups, attending three
catagories
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categories
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dance
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of dance
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classes
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.
Overall
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, private studios
is
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are
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dominant
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the dominant
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 site for young
people
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 attending,
while
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 the rates of
chossing
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choosing
 the rest three locations show a more balanced allocation. Meanwhile, young
people
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 under 11 prefer to ballet,
while
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11
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the 11
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-16
age
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group
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 is interested in modern
dance
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. In terms of
location
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the location
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 of
dance
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classes
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, most young
people
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 tend to choose private studios, at 48%. 24% of
youngster
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youngsters
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 are engaging in school halls, followed by community halls and
other
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others
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, accounting for 18%. The percentage of young attendees joining college-based studios is the
least
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lowest
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, at 10%. Regarding
catagories
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categories
 of
dance
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classes
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, ballet is the most popular
dance
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to
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for
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under
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the under
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 11
age
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group
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,
at
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with
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 600
people
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,
however
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 only 300
people
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 in
11
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the 11
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-16
age
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group
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 choose it.
Whereas
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, the two
age
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 groups display an opposite trend in the choice of modern
dance
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, with more than 500
people
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 choosing modern
dance
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 in
11
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the 11
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-16
age
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group
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, and merely 300 students taking part in it. Meanwhile, the number of students who
paticipate
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participate
participated
 in tap
classes
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 is similar between the two
age
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 groups,
for
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with
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 approximately 450
people
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 in
under
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the under
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 11
age
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group
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 and 420
people
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 in
11
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the 11
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-16
age
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group
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, dance, classes, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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