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You are going on a short training course at a college in Sydney, Australia. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it You do NOT need to write any address.

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Dear Accommodation Officer, My name is Raghav Sharma, and I am
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one
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of
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a student
in
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same
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 college. The purpose of writing
this
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 letter is,
I
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that I
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need a place to stay for my upcoming course in Sydney, Australia. Since, It is a college policy, that if a student is travelling away from the
boundry
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boundary
,
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the accomodation
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accomodation
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accommodation
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 team will provide
with
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the
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suitable measures.
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, from my section, I am the only
one
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 going away, so, I need your help in
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 particular matter. Talking about the stay, It will be very helpful if I get a place within walking distance of the institute, It will help me to save both time
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 expenses for commuting. I need a
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one bedroom
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 apartment over there
,
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 since I am the only
one
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 who is going. I am going to leave after two weeks, the departure date is 14th
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, the journey will take around
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 day, so, starting from 15th
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 I need that place for about a month. I am looking forward to hearing from you, and hope you will meet the requirements. Yours Faithfully, Raghav Sharma.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider restructuring your paragraphs to improve clarity and logical flow. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea.
task achievement
Ensure you maintain a formal tone throughout the letter. Phrases like 'I need' could be softened to 'I would appreciate' for a more polite tone.
task achievement
You provided clear information about your situation and needs, which is essential for the accommodation officer to understand your request.
coherence and cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal, which is suitable for a letter of this kind.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • officer
  • training course
  • require
  • private room
  • shared space
  • location preference
  • amenities
  • duration
  • internet access
  • complimentary breakfast
  • close proximity
  • available options
  • request
  • formal inquiry
  • short-term stay
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