Nowadays tourism generates a significant part of national income for many countries, but it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantage and disadvantages of tourism and provide a logical conclusion.

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many people think that
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generates a significant section of national income for many countries.
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, is
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decision positive or are there more drawbacks than advantages
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essay, I will explore the pros and cons of
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another countries
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. As I start by looking at the advantages, one of the major plus points of
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another
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country from
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tourism
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is that if you want to go
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other country
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you must find
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tourism
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a tourism
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company
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, I can help to find
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companies
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as Novda,Bahor and Piano. When you go to Dubai from the Novda
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. You know
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company
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is wonderful to
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. Take
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is very nice to
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included eating hot
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3 times a day and
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five starts.
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company
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very good
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although
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traveling
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other
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countries from
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companies have numerous beneficial sides. One of them is that nowadays in many conditions,
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visas or tickets
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very expensive.
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causes a lot of problems for people when
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abroad.
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, the most expensive ticket is the Leica share which costs 25 million dollars per person.
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means it is very expensive.
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is valuable to ordinary people, it may even be a dream for them.
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, everything that has been started so far , there are both positive and negative of
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. Personally, I believe the advantages of
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situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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task achievement
Clarify your main points and ensure they clearly relate to the topic. Each paragraph should focus on a specific point related to tourism's advantages or disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your essay. Make sure each paragraph flows into the next, and conclusions are supported by the points made.
task achievement
Provide more concrete examples and explain how they relate to tourism rather than relying heavily on personal anecdotes from specific travel experiences.
content
You have made an effort to include various aspects of tourism, including companies and personal experiences, which shows engagement with the topic.
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