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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enroll in the course

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Dear Enrolment Officer, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest
to join
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in joining
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 computer classes at your establishment.
Taking participation
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 in
computer
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a computer
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 course was always a dream for me, but I belong to a
middle class
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 family and
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of financial resources I did my study with
the
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apply
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limited subjects. My father is a retail store worker and he is the only one earning and feeding the whole family. I have two siblings as well and they are studying in college. So, it is really hard for him to provide me
funds
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 for computer education. I
did'nt
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didn't
completed
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complete
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 the elementary course as well because of
this
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 situation, but, I am
very
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 bright student, Teachers in the school always praise me for my
educations
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education
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 skills. If possible, by considering all the facts, if you can help me it will be appreciated and my family will
get
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 happy as well I am looking forward to hearing from you and hope that you will understand my situation and
helps
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help
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 to get my enrollment done. Yours Sincerely, Raghav Sharma.

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task achievement
Your letter has a clear purpose, but be sure to maintain a professional tone and structure. Consider starting with a more formal introduction and ensuring clear points.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group similar ideas in single paragraphs. For example, one paragraph could focus on your financial situation while another could highlight your academic abilities.
task achievement
Your explanation of your financial situation is clear and provides context for your request.
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You have expressed your enthusiasm for the course well, showing your genuine interest in learning.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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