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Some people think that certain old buildings are more worth preserving than other ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, governments and
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 attempt to uphold historical buildings to improve their income. Some
people
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 believe that protecting the old structures is more valuable than preserving the newest ones. It seems to me rebuilding the reclis is a worthwhile act, and I will explain why in
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, protecting the old stand is essential to restore the chronicles and culture. It means could help
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 to comprehend their ancestor's achievements to be
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in
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 their identity and nations.
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, Abu Simbel Temple in Aswan, has a historical event happening in the place, on a special day every year the sun shines on the King Statue and
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 happens only one day for 365 days. A second factor,
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 building shows us how the past conditions Life,
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 attach old generation and the newest ones.
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,the air Pocket in Luxor shows us how the ancient
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 used
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 method to protect themself from hot and dry weather. The final perhaps most significant element that
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 the reclis can help Countries
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increase their income by attracting tourists to visit
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 places and an economic boom will happen.
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, Egypt can earn a lot of money from it is pyramids. In Conclusion, maintaining the chronicles and
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recalls
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 can help countries to grow their income.
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, let
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 know
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 heritage and ancient
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's lifestyle.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph has a clear main idea that is well supported by details. This improves the clarity of your argument.
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Try to expand on your ideas. Providing more in-depth analysis can make your essay more persuasive and engaging.
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Ensure that your examples are relevant and well-explained. This will help in making your points stronger.
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You present a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential for task response.
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You include interesting examples, such as the Abu Simbel Temple and the use of air pockets in Luxor.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preserve
  • heritage
  • historical significance
  • cultural heritage
  • architecture
  • monument
  • aesthetic value
  • tourism
  • urban development
  • economic impact
  • investment
  • community identity
  • cultural identity
  • architectural merit
  • historic site
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