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Some people think only best students should be rewarded. Others think we should reward students who make progress. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, It is an undeniable fact that
reward
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to
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students
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has
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 always been a debatable issue. Few individuals believe that
prize
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the prize
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 should be given to top learners only,
while
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 a handful of denizens think that it should be given to
students
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 who are making growth. In my opinion, both
the
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views are correct, since both
type
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 of
students
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 are working hard. On the one hand, good
students
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 should definitely get rewarded by learning institutions
beacuse
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because
 they work harder than other individuals to achieve that position.
Also
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, rewards boost their confidence level, helps them to perform
more
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better in
studies
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their studies
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 and
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students
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 to compete in other
activites
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activities
 as well,
such
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 as sports, inter-curricular etc.
Hence
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, educators
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 study more interesting if rewards are set to be given to top
students
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.
On the other hand
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, learners who are making progress in their studies should be given a prize as well, because, not all the
students
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 in a class
ends
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 up
at
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 first position. To explicate, teachers need to see the efforts of
individual
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individuals
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 who
is
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are
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 improving
himself
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themselves
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 day-by-day and give them
prize
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a prize
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, so other citizens will
also
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get
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influence
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 by watching them and they will do the same.
To conclude
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, presents need to be given to both the
students
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, the ones who perform at peak level
as well as
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 the ones who are growing, so it will encourage them to do
more
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apply
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better in
studies
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their studies
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 and others will
get
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be
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influence
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influenced
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 as well .

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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