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Some people do same type of work for long time, while others change the type of work frequently. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In recent years, there has been a growing trend among employees to change
work
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 type after a few years in order to gain different experiences and
skills
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.
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, other group of people spend their whole
life
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lives
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 doing the same
work
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 as they might not have any other knowledge and
skills
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 to get hired for different
role
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roles
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.
This
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 essay will elaborate on both views and will explain why I believe that it is
individual's
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an individual's
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 choice whether to change their roles over
time
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 or stick to
one
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 position. On the
one
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 hand, working with the same employer for years helps individuals to master
in
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one
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 field and make good relations with other employees
as well as
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 get
experienced
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by
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the
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apply
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time
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.
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, long-term commitments to
one
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 type of
work
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 have more chances of promotions in
individual's
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an individual's
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 position which results in increasing income and improves the standard of living.
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, many corporations offer higher salaries and promotions to employees who have worked for a long
time
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. Google is
one
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 of them, it promotes people on a yearly basis and increases
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 hourly salary.
Entry-level
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The entry-level
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 worker receives almost $140,000 and individuals who are at level 3 or above might earn up to $250,000.
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, proponents of frequently changing
work
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type
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types
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 gain a variety of
skills
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 and knowledge by working with different companies and various roles
this
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 leads to making individuals more capable of competing in the job market.
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, changing jobs regularly boosts
individual's
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an individual's
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 confidence, and adaptation
skills
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 and enhances personal growth it
also
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 leads to more career options.
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, if
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due
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to
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for
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 any reason, a person got terminated from
one
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 job he/she can apply to another career and can easily get selected based on their experience in different roles. In conclusion, I personally believe that sticking to a job or changing jobs frequently completely depends on a person's choice of career goal and dedication. There are a few fields which require continuous learning over
time
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such
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 as information technology
whereas
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 jobs like a teacher only need knowledge about the subject and benefits in the long-term employment.

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task achievement
Ensure that you clearly state your opinion in the introduction. This helps the reader know your stance right away.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking devices more effectively to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly.
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Add more varied examples to support your points; this will strengthen your arguments and make the essay more compelling.
content
Your essay presents a balanced view on the topic, which is commendable.
content
You have provided relevant examples that support your main points well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • advocate
  • deep expertise
  • mastery
  • job satisfaction
  • long-term commitment
  • stability
  • predictability
  • professional relationships
  • broad skill set
  • adaptability
  • versatile
  • competitive
  • job market
  • dynamic
  • stimulating
  • career stagnation
  • personal and professional growth
  • career goals
  • continual learning
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