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Band 2.5

In the forthcoming, all cars buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the upcoming years all the cars, buses and trucks will be
driverless
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. The only individuals will be the passengers. I agree with
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this
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 notion that the advantages of
driverless
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 vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. And
i
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 will illustrate my points in
this
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 essay.
Firstly
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, the disadvantage of
driverless
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 vehicles is the fear in the passengers, because they are not very used to it and
that is
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 the biggest reason for their discomfort. To explain it, most of the masses are not familiar with
driverless
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 transportation till now and it is new for them.
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, in Schottland when the government
introduce
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 their first
driverless
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 tramp their own people
was
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 not ready because they never had the experience before.
Thus
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, the project failed even before they tried it.
Furthermore
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, nowadays people are
adappting
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adapting
adopting
 the new technology by the time. Everyone is living in
the
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an
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 era where technology
such
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 as
driverless
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 vehicles will take place soon and they are all waiting for it. To elaborate, a survey was conducted
in
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at
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 the end of 2024 by the TESLA that how they like to be inside a
driverless
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 vehicle.
And the
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The
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 result was suppressing 7 out of 10 people
agree
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on
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 it.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure to include a conclusion that summarizes your main points clearly and restates your position on the topic.
task achievement
Expand on your arguments to provide clearer explanations and support; consider adding specific examples or elaborating on your points to avoid vague statements.
coherence and cohesion
Revise grammatical errors and ensure smoother transitions between ideas for improved clarity and readability.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion on the topic and structured your essay with an introduction and body paragraphs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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