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Some people prefer to live in a big city, while others prefer to live in a small town. Which do you prefer, and why?

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Living in big
cities
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 is always debatable and has become more controversial in recent times. In my opinion, I prefer to stay in small
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town
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towns
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whereas
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 other individuals like to live in big
cities
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. I will elaborate
my
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 thoughts in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with,
while
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 living in
small
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a small
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town
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 it is convenient to maintain
work life
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 balance.
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, as per my experience people from small
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town
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towns
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 as more humble and ready to make connections
as
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 help each other.
However
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, in big
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cities
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 individuals are so occupied in their lives that they do not have
time
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 for anyone. As per
the
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 recent survey, youngsters from big
cities
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 are more prone to mental health issues
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 as depression.
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, travelling
time
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 is another benefit of living in
small
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town
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. You don't need to spend hours to travel for work or school.
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, in big
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cities
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cities,
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 people usually travel for almost more than an hour to reach
to
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their offices or schools and stuck in traffic.
Therefore
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, in small
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town
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towns
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, individuals can save their travelling
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 and spend the same
time
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 with their friends and families which makes their bond stronger. In conclusion, I would like to assert that living in small towns
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 always comfortable and convenient as stated above through examples as well.

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grammar
Consider revising some sentences for grammatical accuracy and clarity. For example, 'to stay in small town' should be 'to stay in a small town.'
content
Try to include more specific examples or experiences in your points to strengthen your arguments. For instance, you could describe a personal experience that emphasizes community support in small towns.
structure
Make sure your conclusion clearly summarizes your main points and restates your preference more emphatically. Adding a final thought can leave a stronger impression.
content
You present a clear preference for living in small towns and provide relevant reasons for this choice.
coherence
Your essay follows a logical progression of ideas, moving from one point to the next fairly smoothly.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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