The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other's countries in 2011

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other's countries in 2011
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other's countries in 2011
The table illustrates the amounts of different
people
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from five
countries
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in Europe in 2011 including the
UK
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, Germany, Italy,
Poland
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,
Spain
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and Spain
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.
Moreover
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, the information in the table displayed only just the immigrated
people
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because they did not show the amounts of
the
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citizens
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who lived in their
countries
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.
Overall
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, we could notice that Germany had the greatest number of
people
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lived
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living
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in
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while
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it while
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Poland
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had the least
citizens
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that
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at that
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time. First of all, Germany had the most foreign individuals from other
countries
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, followed by the
UK
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and Spain, respectively. In fact, the number of
people
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in all of those three nations
were
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was
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approximately
at
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apply
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one million
people
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.
In contrast
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, just about 6,000
of
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foreign
citizens
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lived in
Poland
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while
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most of the Polish
immigrate
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immigrated
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to
the
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apply
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other states, especially
in
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the
UK
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. In summary, most
people
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preferred living in the
UK
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, Italy and Spain.
On the other hand
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, there were just a bit of
citizens
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who preferred living in
Poland
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, even Polish
people
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also
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lived in foreign
countries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries, uk, poland, citizens with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration patterns
  • European nations
  • cross-country movements
  • bilateral migration links
  • economic impacts
  • social integration
  • political influence
  • European Union regulations
  • cultural integration
  • language barriers
  • socio-economic opportunities
  • historic ties
  • geographical proximity
  • host country
  • population movements
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